HST195 Vietnam  Assignment #2  Feedback
  
Poor theme choice.

I'm afraid that the paper exhibits some grammar/spelling/typo problems.  Please have someone proofread your work.

The paper exhibits some grammar/spelling/typo problems and a number of awkwardly worded sentences, which led to unsupported statements.

Reminder: Always write history in past tense. These events have already happened. These speakers have already spoken about their stories.

Your conclusion strayed a bit and tried to wrap up much more than the assigned topic/your theme.  Don't try to say or conclude too much about the entire war with just a few short stories.

I think this paragraph may have been too brief to clearly make your point.

Best paper in class.  Best factual support.  You've inspired me to contact the people at Moodle and see if we can't get the program to allow us to award MORE than the actual maximum points!

I'd like to be able to use parts of this paper, anonymously, for future students to see as an example.  Can I have your permission?  (By the way, I do not intend to put ANY pressure on you.  We personally don't know each other well enough to make any assumptions.  I don't know if you are "protective" of your intellectual content or feel uneasy about this request.  Perhaps you are just fine with it.  I'll be just fine with your decision either way.  Please send me a Moodle message with your reply.)

First, I'm glad we've had a chance to speak in person, in my office, towards the beginning of the term.  Most students in the class do not have that little advantage.  For me, it allowed me to see your point of view.

Great theme.  Very well written and unique in this class.  Your personal experiences were a welcome commentary on the stories you chose.

I'm not sure "aerial bombardment" suffices as a real theme or not.  But you did run with it and support it well.  Your story choices were appropriate.  And even though your paper read as a bit more narrative than analytical, it was well written, and therefore the score.

Thank you for your service to our country.

Your paper was impressive and the most unique in class.  You were the only one to look analytically at three of the Vietnamese accounts.  You've inspired me to contact the people at Moodle and see if we can't get the program to allow us to award MORE than the actual maximum points!